Hey lewdies ❤❤❤
Here is the final part of the story, a kind of chapter conclusion: Jade invited Alison to stay at her place.
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Ideas for future stories
TL:DR More sex soon
I don't mean to be dramatic at all, don't worry :3
You've maybe noticed that I've posted a bunch of mini stories lately. A lot of "lore", drama stuff, nothing too much sexual.
In a sense, I actually love drawing art focused on conflicts and personalities! My characters feel so alive and human. They have even more value for me.
But today, I'm in this position: I feel out of the place, sometimes boring, sometimes bored, and something must change or evolve
It actually happened several times in the past: at a point, I create new characters in order to simply draw them... in any situation, in any position, doing anything they want, without caring about anything. And then! I fall in love, and ... I draw them more and more. Then, step by step, I weave a web between all those drawings/posts and I create a kind of universe for those loved characters. I feel the need to respect them, and the consistency: I spend weeks to write a proper transitions, I spend time adding extra details, etc... and I'm falling into this kind of "polishing" trap.
Don't get me wrong, I still love creating story telling
Today I feel that I'm slowly sliding on the side again, with all these "lore" posts.
I miss the time when I was excited and kinky every day.
I miss old stories
More simple, more silly
I'm gonna fix it tomorrow and I'll do my best
PS: I won't stop writting lore and drama, I will reduce/shorten them to emphasize the sex parts.
---Previous part (Karen's side): https://lewdua.blogspot.com/2021/10/david-natasha-and-karen-in-bathroom.html
Previous part (Alison's side): https://lewdua.blogspot.com/2021/10/at-jades-part-6-final.html
Full story: https://lewdua.blogspot.com/p/alison-and-jade-part-2-reconciliation.html
More about Alison and Jade: https://lewdua.blogspot.com/p/alison-and-jade.html
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Comments
J'apprécie beaucoup tout le lore que tu as fait ainsi que les parties erotique, continue comme ça.
So do what you do, at your rythm , public will be here ^^
Anyway, good job as always Lewdua, I really liked the expressions on this one.
I primarily come to this website for the sexy material. I don't view it like a web comic that prominently features sex. Not yet at least. If you would rather be writing a bigger story, though, you have my full support. Whatever you decide to focus on going forward, it is important to me as a reader that the story is more than the sum of its parts.
This might come off as critical, but please let me explain.
I have no doubts that when you draw sexy content that it will be great. If you choose to pursue a heavier story, I'd like to see more than just conflict between the many characters you've built up. Historically, everyone has been friends with a few characters pushing for sexy encounters. The conflict that existed was mostly tension over being caught within one comic which rarely developed into much. That's totally fine, the story at the time was primarily focused on sex so I wasn't expecting much.
More recently, the main story has shifted to one of characters escalating conflict between one another. While there have been some payoffs here and there alongside the development of newer characters, the feeling I've gotten overall has been a downer. Conflict absolutely has its place in storytelling, but in a traditional story structure it is balanced and paced by contrasting beats. My perspective on the more recent lewdies story has been: drama, sexy flirting, sex, sex, tension, sexy development, drama, drama, sex, sex, sex, sexy drama, sexy development, sexy drama, sexy development, sexy development, more sexy development, dramatic payoff, dramatic development, sexy drama, flashback of a tonally more positive time, sexy development, sex, drama.
Now, I love the development that's been going on, but I do not feel like someone having sex with someone new is a positive payoff. It's kind of what I expect on here. While there has been lots of relationship building, the overwhelming feeling I've gotten is one of people drifting apart while fleshing out new, interesting characters. Relationship building has been a great source of tension and anticipation, but the results have been reminders of regret and conflict :<. The new stuff is always punctuated with down beats. I've been sorely missing the narrative up beats and positive payoffs from this new development.
When telling a story in an episodic fashion like this, it is important to keep in mind the emotional valence that the reader is experiencing. Other artists who do web comics in this fashion split their story up into chapters so that they can more easily meter and pace the tone of their story and convey to the reader what point in the story we are in. If we've been in ACT 1 of a story for six updates and the next is the last update in that act, I expect some kind of inciting incident to shake things up. I look forward to that update. I am more comfortable with the ride I'm being taken on because I have an expectation of a traditional story structure.
Meanwhile, I've been looking forward to more Iris and Morgan story because I know it ends positively. I've been going back and reading Lola and Pemela because I expect their relationship to blossom positively. I'm longing for more emotional relief.
Your world has been a fascinating one to read, and my feedback should come with the large caveat that I am very satisfied. But if this is the direction YOU want to go in, I'd also like to see more reason for me to come back and read it. I obviously don't speak for everyone on here, only myself, but given the result of the last survey, I am not at all surprised that the characters who regularly contribute to negative story beats were not rated highly.
I love everything you do. Please do whatever makes you happy. My feedback is just a glimpse into what one of your devoted readers has been feeling more and more recently.
More simple, more silly
-> Hi ! Thats fine ! Make what you like. It's cool to quicken then pace a bit and do that again. Comming back and forth is what's best to not got bored ;) (I think ?)
AND I think Alison needed that punch (while I love her character most, it's what's best for her)
Why does karen have to be such a pain in the ass like alison hasn't been through enough already, it's like putting lemon juice on a paper cut.
But i love how you have jade being there for alison touches the heart well ,and love how the art styles improve every time.
One of the biggest things to having an enjoyable story is making the characters likeable/relatable and I can honestly say that I really don't like most of the main characters, i.e. nessie, alison, karen, natasha (though I like natasha more than the others as she seems more like a victim of circumstance than an active "bad actor"). It is for this reason that I don't follow this blog that closely and only visit once every month or so when I'm reminded about your art somewhere else and decide to drop in for a look and even then, I'm mostly expecting depressing drama instead of sexy times. That's not a good way to retain viewers.
Now I'm not saying you can't have drama, but there HAS to be an emotional pay off. It has to be balanced with positive stories. Drama should be treated as a rare delicacy to enhance positive story notes and make us (the viewers) appreciate the happy/heartwarming plots more. Think of drama as being like going to an absurdly expensive restaurant for your birthday. Every once in a while it's a fun and amazing treat, but if you do it every week it loses that sense of specialness (and also makes you go broke).
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